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#26 8/15/2010 5:12 pm

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Re: TWO Stories!

God.Of.Green wrote:

"Hehe, Boom Headshot" Sean whispers under his breath.

cool Who exactly did I get a headshot on =\ lmao


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#27 8/15/2010 5:37 pm

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Re: TWO Stories!

At some points it was in the present tense and at others it was written in the past tense. The point of view also kept changing. Please stick to one.


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#28 8/15/2010 6:45 pm

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Re: TWO Stories!

Shadowken42 wrote:

At some points it was in the present tense and at others it was written in the past tense. The point of view also kept changing. Please stick to one.

Are you being a hater because you're not in the story? yikes

but I agree, stick tuh one tense.


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#29 8/15/2010 9:53 pm

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Re: TWO Stories!

SeanxThexAssassin wrote:

God.Of.Green wrote:

"Hehe, Boom Headshot" Sean whispers under his breath.

cool Who exactly did I get a headshot on =\ lmao

You got it on Tonus while firing back. You put a hole in his cheek.

Past tense present tense, I'm going for present. I have a problem of mixing the two. I'll try and stick to present but i actually don't care, as long as you get the message.


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#30 8/16/2010 3:46 pm

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Re: TWO Stories!

There must be some reference to cats in jungle. ^_^

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#31 8/16/2010 4:08 pm

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Re: TWO Stories!

Kitty.Alicia wrote:

There must be some reference to cats in jungle. ^_^

HINT: ME

Well you were going to be in island, but Jungle works too.

I will start Island and Castle tonight. Expect the next story in 2 days.


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#32 8/16/2010 4:18 pm

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Castle is my home. cool


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#33 8/16/2010 6:05 pm

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Re: TWO Stories!

i wana raip teh kao in castle n hav it dy uv AIDS


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#34 8/16/2010 6:10 pm

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Re: TWO Stories!

plzzzzzzzzz


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#35 8/16/2010 10:32 pm

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NYAR NYAR NYAR NYAR NYAR NYAR NYAR NYAR YOU EH COUGER  KILLERBEARS GO NYAR NYAR NYAR

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#36 8/17/2010 12:51 am

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Re: TWO Stories!

Hmm. very nice? long reading (it killed me within the last setence) there was a few mistakes id like to put up (because im picky like that) but ill tell you in AK.


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#37 8/17/2010 1:51 am

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5150 wrote:

NYAR NYAR NYAR NYAR NYAR NYAR NYAR NYAR YOU EH COUGER  KILLERBEARS GO NYAR NYAR NYAR

u doant hav teh f33l 4 it mahn. jus stik wif ur gaiy 5150 dreem d00d

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i hait dem.


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#38 8/17/2010 4:48 am

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Re: TWO Stories!

I loved both of your stories Green. Keep making more. smile

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#39 8/17/2010 5:07 am

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Re: TWO Stories!

SNMbonecrusher33SNM wrote:

I loved both of your stories Green. Keep making more. smile

Ok, I will make Island today And my new editor is . . .

Bone from SNM! so before I post new stories he will edit them. So there will be even less mistakes. ;D expect Island in less than 40 hours!

Edit: Island is finished, It just needs to be edited. Expect it by tonight.

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#40 8/17/2010 4:16 pm

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Re: TWO Stories!

So can I rape the cow? smile


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#41 8/17/2010 8:07 pm

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Here it is, The heartbreaking story . . . Island.

“Set!” I dove beside the net, extending my arms fully I propelled the ball into the air before landing face first into the sand. “Match!”, Cloud says, finishing my thought. He arches his back and brings his hand down with an epic force spiking the ball over the net. The volleyball flew down into the sand so quickly, neither Bone, Abby, or Jade were able to react in time. “Yay we win!”, Dev screams. “Twhoo!” I spit sand out of my mouth “Not worth it. I can still taste the sand in my mouth.” “Hey at least we won.”, Cloud said as he helped me up from the ground. “GGs.”, Bone said as he walked over ducking under the net with the rest of his team. The horizon was bright with the sun’s rays. Music booms out of the stereo. “Volleyball in the morning isn’t my thing”, Jade said. “Yeah seriously, I’m still half asleep.”, I chimed in. “The early bird catches the worm.”, Abby smiled. “Yeah but the early worm gets eaten by the early bird. See where this is going?”, Cloud said. “Whatever, we still won and that’s all that matters.”, Dev laughed. “Next time I’ll be the one laughing.”, Bone chuckled. “Well let’s get off this sand and do some exploring. I heard that people use to live on these Islands. Who knows, we might find some cool stuff.” “What about the mission, Bone?” Cloud says,“We need to deliver the health care packages by tomorrow. And this is ideal weather for boating.” “We have all day Cloud; don’t be a stick in the mud.”, I said. “I’m trying to keep on task. That’s all. Go have your adventure, I’ll be on the boat” Cloud enters the boat with Abby and Jade. “Well Dev, want to come with us?”, Bone asks. “Of course, It’s better than being stuck in a boat all day.” The three of us walk over from the north side of the island towards the east. Climbing over three small rocky hills we make it to the east side of Island. “Look, that’s man-made.” I point at the wooden platforms covered in old grass and green growth. “It sure is. It looks like a lot of trees and branches were used to make those.”, Dev agrees. Bone peeks into a hole in the hill and looks back at us. “I think this is a cave” “Be careful there could be a bear in there”, I said. “Really Green? A bear on an Island? That makes no sense at all.”, Bone laughs. “Yeah Green, that was kind of dumb.”, Dev says. I pause for a moment “Whatever. Just trying to scare ya.” I smile. “Okay then, let’s go in the cave then and-” “Naw, let’s just climb on top of it.”, I say, interrupting Bone. “Are you scared Green?”, Dev asked. “Of course not, I just . . . ugh I'll prove it.” I enter the cave quickly and trip on the quickly elevating ground below my feet, forcing me on my stomach. I slide down the small hill I originally tripped on and suddenly feel stupid. “Ow, this cave looked bigger than I expected it to be.” “Haha! Green you’re so silly.”, Bone points and laughs. “You okay Green?”, Dev asks as she helps me up. “Never better.”, I reply. The light from the sun leans into the cave slightly, making it easier to see. “Wow, an altar! I wonder what kinds of people made this.”, Bone says in amazement. Dev takes a picture of it. “It looks like something I can look up when we return back to our castle.” “Enough of this. let's climb to the top of the island!”, I say as I climb the makeshift platforms. Dev and Bone follow. “Wow, I can smell the ocean air from up here”, says Dev. Bone wraps his arm around Dev playfully and says,“Take our picture of us Green. We’re on top of the Island!” “Haha, fine, smile.” I take Dev’s camera and stand back. Looking through the camera, the sun appeared between their faces and set a perfect picture. “3, 2, . . . Why aren't you smiling?” Their faces turn to horror as a hissing sound from behind me gets louder. “Duck!” Bone runs towards me and pulls me behind him suddenly. The rock I was propelled into trips me into Dev and the camera bounces down the stone steps of the hill while an explosion sends us all over the edge of the hill. Falling onto the ground, I quickly respond by looking for everyone. Dev is knocked out on a platform and Bone is nowhere to be found. “Dev!” I crawl to her side. “I’m fine, go find Bone, Green.” With tears in my eyes I replied,“Of course.” Thinking of Bone I gain the strength to get on my feet and stumble towards the edge of the Island. I look down and see Bone hanging on to the small cliff bleeding profusely from his left shoulder, which is somewhat missing. “Bone grab my hand!” I reach and grab his wrist and interlock hands; his right hand griping my wrist and mine gripping his. Everything becomes silent. Bone looks up at me. Dangling on strings of fear Bone cries. “Survive for me.” “No Bone! You can’t die!”,I yell. “Don’t leave me!”, My tears drip onto his forehead. “I’ll see you on the other side Green.” I feel his grip release as his soul exits his body. He became limp and I finally let go. His body falls into the salty sea. He drifts far against the waves turning the water around him red. His glistening  hair and broken body only make me even more sad. After staring for a minute, his body finally crosses the horizon, leaving us forever. I pull out my walkie-talkie and hold down the send button. “Cloud, Bring my weapons and yourself to the east side of the Island. They killed Bone.” Without hesitation I hear the boats motor in the background and Cloud’s quick response. “I’ll be there in no time.” The walkie-talkie clicks and there is silence. I run back to Dev. “Bone?”,She cries. “He didn’t make it.” “No! those monsters!” “I know Dev.” I walk her into the small cave. “I’ll get them back, just hide with me.” But Bone is Mm-”  I cover her mouth with my hand. The sounds of footsteps are heard from the stone steps above us. “I think we got all of them.”, A man’s voice says. The footsteps stop and another voice is heard but not loud enough to understand. It was silent. “Stay here”, I tell Dev as quietly as I make my way under the platforms outside of the cave. A man jumps down from above and doesn’t notice me. I push him from behind knocking him on his knees. “What th-” I knock him on his back and pin him down. “Delsaber! What have you done!”, I yelled. Before he could respond I started to pound his face with punches. “Bone’s dead because of you!” Covering his face, he starts to whine for help. Thinking of Bone I could only focus on killing Delsaber. I pressed my left hand against his throat digging my thumb into his Adam’s apple as I brought the bottom of my fist on his covered face continuously until the whining stopped. “No!", Dev shouted. I turned around and a bullet flew through my afro just missing my head. Shadowken looked up from his sniper rifle’s scope only to see my disconcerted face painted in blood and rage. The glare I gave him was like no other freezing him in place. The boat comes around with Jade steadying her rifle on the metal baring. Shadowken turns to run but is stricken in his back with a bullet. Crawling into the cave for protection, he is only welcomed by Dev’s foot kicking him towards me. “Why is there always fighting?", I pick him up by the collar. “As long as there is land to fight for, this will continue forever.”, He replied. I tightly grip his arm, turn, pulling him in my direction, and toss him into the sea. A sniper rifle and three grenades are thrown from the boat, to my side. Cloud hands the boat’s wheel off to Abby as he makes his way onto the island. “For Bone.”, Cloud says as he climbs the platforms towards the west side of the Island. I quickly pick up my weapons and follow. “Help”, Delsaber cries bleeding in the grass. Jade aims and sends a bullet into Delsaber silencing his cries for help. “You’re welcome.”, Jade said in disgust. “Cloud, I see no one”, I say as we stand on the stone steps. “Let’s make sure they got the message then.” Cloud takes out an impact grenade, a normal grenade and some duct tape and wraps the two together. “I have a message for them.” He pulls the pin and aims at a high angle throwing the grenade far across the Island. It flies farther than the stone structure in the distance and explodes flinging a man towards us and the rest of the enemy behind the large rock and into the sea. Cloud’s throw was the farthest I’ve ever seen a grenade fly. It truly amazed me. I ran down the stairs, jumped over a broken bridge, and squeezed through a rock and a wooden platform. I find Burn on the uneven rocks of the Island. “You idiot! I lost someone special to me because of your need to fight!”, I yelled. In a blind rage I tackled Burn and spit in his face. “Goodbye Green.” He revealed a grenade missing a pin in his hand. I rolled back but it was too late. The explosion’s blast blew me up from the ground. My ears ring with the explosion’s echo. The light blinds me, as everything turns white as I feel the shrapnel pieces of the grenade enter my legs. I fly up and hit a wooden platform with my back and smash my head back. My body burns and death finally grips me as I fall to earth. “Green it’s nice to see you again. I didn’t expect it to be so . . . soon.” “Bone? I fought for you.” “I can see that, but you have a lot more to do than worry about a lost soul like mine.” “What do you mean?” “Look, you don’t need to avenge me, I just want you to remember me for who I was.” “I see. Too late for that right?” “It’s never too late Green. I’ll always be with you. Tell everyone goodbye for me, I’m retiring for good.”, Bone smiles and drifts away. My eyes open and the walls turn from white to brown. The ringing finally ends and I return. “He’s awake!”, Dev yells out of the room. The boat swayed back and forth, rocking me awake more. “He is?”, Jade asks as she walks in. After coughing a bit I finally am able to speak, “I’m alive?”, I ask. “Yep, you’re a lucky one.” Jade replies. I looked to my right and see Shadowken chained to a chair and gagged. I look at the celling and say, “Bone wanted me to tell you, goodbye.” I yawn and spill tears from my eyes. Cloud drives the boat past the horizon and the six of us leave for our castle, our home.

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Edited by: Bone
^_^ hope you liked it, Jungle is next then Castle, oh and I will not make an appearance in Jungle. Please post feedback


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#42 8/17/2010 8:11 pm

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Btw, Green that story was quite touching. That was sweet of you to think of me and avenge my death. xD

(No, I'm not gay. (wary))

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#43 8/17/2010 8:14 pm

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Re: TWO Stories!

10/10

Can I rape cow in castle


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#44 8/17/2010 8:17 pm

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Re: TWO Stories!

alrocks7283 wrote:

10/10

Can I rape cow in castle

Thanks for the 10/10!
sorry, rape is a touching issue for many people including me and will not be used in my stories.

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#45 8/17/2010 8:18 pm

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How about we have sex, but not rape? :]


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#46 8/17/2010 8:21 pm

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Re: TWO Stories!

alrocks7283 wrote:

How about we have sex, but not rape? :]

Again, Bestiality is a touchy issue . . . I can go on forever ;D ill attempt to put a lot of people in castle, but It may get a little confusing.


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#47 8/18/2010 3:26 am

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This is stupid T_T Everyone knows that castle is my home, not island.


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#48 8/18/2010 4:02 am

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Mine is the cave in island. I rape the little 7 year olds who play TWO in there.


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#49 8/18/2010 5:26 am

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Shadowken42 wrote:

This is stupid T_T Everyone knows that castle is my home, not island.

I know, Your still alive and will be in Castle silly.


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#50 8/18/2010 6:33 am

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This is awesome. Green, do you mind adding me in this? I wanna be on your team and not die. xD
Hey Green, if you add me in Castle of Jungle, can you also add me in Void? That's my true home. xD

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